Best Beginning! (Ends March 25th)

Do you have a good first chapter or prologue to a story? Post it here, and I will review and find a winner! This is for the best beginning of a story--not just a short story!

I will have first and second place winners, and I will give each a critique on their contest entry.

Rules: Post a link to your story in this topic. Stories MUST be on POP. Any genre allowed--but no storybook beginnings. No artwork, unless it's a graphic novel beginning. NO R-rated stories, I will read anything that is rated G, PG, or PG-13. This contest will end March 25th, which is when I will read the stories. ONLY ONE ENTRY ALLOWED.

Any questions? Post them here, as well as your link!

Jamon

I'm in! This sounds great. I can never do openings.

The Immortals was good! Although I will admit that I liked #12 better than #1... and a few others. Still, they all get a gold star in my book.

No! This is my 100th post! lol, you beat me...

I think I improved along the way... I might use this as a chance to rewirte my chapter one! Hehe!

Well I have a beginning of a story I'm writing, I'm almost 1/4 the way through at the moment and the beginning is really short, about 1000 words. I find it better that I do the rest of the story firs tthen come back to the beginning while I'm revising my work. I admit its not very good but unfortunetly its the best I have at present

I'll post it when I get your approval; you do things that no one wants then bam, in your face.

What do you mean, my approval?

Most forums I go to I get flamed / suspended / banned without permission of posting something big or sometimes posting at all my opinions or thoughts or basically anything that involves me speaking

Ah. Don't worry, you won't get in trouble for posting anything! (If you want to enter, could you please post the link in this thread?)

Well here we go

https://markcrawford.darkbb.com/fantasy-f9/serroth-shackles-of-the-damned-pg-13-beginning-contest-1000-words-approx-t76.htm#625

fingers crossed

OK, here's mine:

Click here

Thanks for the entries, but I do need more! I can't do this with just two... I may have to extend the contest length, or let people submit more than one. I'm not sure.

I've read both of the entries, and they're both very good.

The ending is still 16 days away, you've already had 2 in 3 days.

Yeah, but there aren't very many people on the site.

Fair point...

MORE PEOPLE JOIN!

Oh, definitely!